As I swim in the deep blue I find a big brown thing as big as the sky scraper. I flopped my feet to get a better look.
“Oh my god! Is that a statue of a man?” I think to myself. I quickly cling on to it, WOW it’s huge as I stepped on his head as the sunlight touched his face. It looked like zeus the god of lightning and god of all gods. Is it from Rome? It's as big as a whale.
I keep swimming around it because it looks weird. then I push his nose and I heard a loud click …
“AHHH” I screamed “I’m falling AHHHH “ then I see…a lotto ticket What is that doing here. I landed on a mat and slowly creped up to a skeleton I was so scared I squeeze the lotto ticket and touched it and then he stated to talk “come with me “ he said in a low voice so I creeped back a little then he grabbed me by the wrist what is he doing ? he's as scary as Ronald mcdonald
as im shaking to my core he stops and I try to break free but he is to strong and I think to myself “how is a skeleton strong?” then he throws me to a bottom of a cave and I slowly back away to the end of the cave.Then I hear a CRACK...CRACK...CRACK
“Ahhhhhhhhhh I’m falling ahh” then it slowly turns pitch black.Is it supposed to be exciting or scary this is as worse as getting bitten by a snake.
This is amazing because you were really descriptive.
ReplyDeleteDid you know that I love to swim?
Next time, you should try to use more similes.
What gave you the idea to write this story?
This story is very imaginative, I loved reading it. Perhaps next time you could add in more punctuation to make it to flow when you read it. I would love to find out what happens next
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you used your imagination.
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